Dear [Name]

2016-07-18 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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TGIF~!! We talked about your new president, and tax. As far as I heard from you, of course I couldn't understand what you meant completely, your people like new president because he keeps low tax policy. In my country where polarization is severe when it comes to income, low tax is not good for our society. I don't mean we need to make the poor pay more tax but the rich pay more tax. I respect someone who succeed on their own. But small amount of money the rich just keep in their accounts might be useful for people in need. We don't actually have an equal opportunity to earn money. While the poor can't make money no matter how hard they do their best, the rich have so many options to earn moeny such as investing stocks, renting business, exploiting their employees. Without proper actions, our society would be devastated as the Great Depression was. No man is an island. We can't live happily while making others remain unhappy. Bill Gates, Warren Buffett donate a lot.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],

Actually that\'s not what I said. I said our new president is doing his best to keep his promise during the election campaign to eradicate the problem of illegal drug use in our country. I am happy that he is keeping his promise but like I said it\'s only his first month as our president so I am keeping the \'let\'s wait and see attitude\'. Regarding tax, I haven\'t heard a new policy regarding this or that he plans to change anything regarding this. Have a nice day! See you!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

 

TGIF~!! We talked about your new president, and tax.

>> correct!

As far as I heard from you, of course I couldn\'t understand what you meant completely, your people like new president because he keeps low tax policy.

>>As far as I heard from you, of course I couldn\'t understand what you meant completely, the people like the new president because he keeps low tax policy.

In my country where polarization is severe when it comes to income, low tax is not good for our society.

>>correct

I don\'t mean we need to make the poor pay more tax but the rich pay more tax.

>>correct!

I respect someone who succeed on their own.

>>correct!

But small amount of money the rich just keep in their accounts might be useful for people in need.

>>correct!

We don\'t actually have an equal opportunity to earn money.

>>correct!

While the poor can\'t make money no matter how hard they do their best, the rich have so many options to earn money such as investing in stocks, renting business, exploiting their employees.

>>While the poor can\'t make money no matter how hard they do their best, the rich have so many options to earn money such as investing in stocks, renting business, and exploiting their employees.

Without proper actions, our society would be devastated as the Great Depression was.

>>correct!

No man is an island.

>>correct!

We can\'t live happily while making others remain unhappy.

>>correct!

Bill Gates, Warren Buffett donate a lot.

>>correct!

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