Dear [Name]. [Name] (II)

Good afternoon [이름] [이름]!

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Amanda ^-^

Dear [Name]. [Name],

How are you?

Let me start by thanking you for all the help that you\'ve provided me. You\'ve been such a great help, and I can\'t say thank you enough. 

Let me explain my current situation briefly. My institution is constructing a new hospital, and my current hospital is supposed to relocate to the new hospital in 2019. For that reason, our hospital head doesn’t want to allow anyone to go on a visiting scholarship for a long period of time. When we go on a visiting scholarship, we receive financial support from the hospital, but under the current situation, it\'s hard to get one.

I thought that next year would be the best time to go on a visiting scholarship for my career.  I initially thought that my hospital would allow me to go on a visiting scholarship if I win the grant from the government, unfortunately, it didn\'t work that way. I’m afraid that I might not be able to meet the one-year period that I applied for. I had a talk with the hospital director yesterday and I got his approval, but it\'s only for a period of three months. However, he promised to allow me to go on a visiting scholarship for one whole year after two years. 

I hope it\'s not too much to ask, but can you possibly accept me as a visiting scholar for 3 months sometime next year? I can only get the grant from the Korean government in case you accept me. I know this is a difficult request since 3 months is such a short time to do something. I think I can go for another visit for one whole year after my new hospital is stabilized which will hopefully happen within the next 2 to 3 years.

I am really sorry to disappoint you. I completely understand the difficult nature of my request, so whatever decision you make, I will take and respect it.  

Best regard,

[이름]

Revised version after our class:

Dear [Name]. [Name],

How are you?

Let me start by thanking you for all the help that you\'ve provided me. You\'ve been such a great help, and I can\'t say thank you enough. 

Let me explain my current situation briefly. My institution is constructing a new hospital, and my current hospital is supposed to relocate to the new hospital in 2019. For that reason, our hospital head doesn’t want to allow anyone to go on a visiting scholarship for a long period of time. When we go on a visiting scholarship, we receive financial support from the hospital, but under the current situation, it\'s hard to get one.

I thought that next year would be the best time to go on a visiting scholarship for my career.  I initially thought that my hospital would allow me to go on a visiting scholarship if I win the grant from the government, unfortunately, it didn\'t work that way. I’m afraid that I might not be able to meet the one-year period that I applied for. I had a talk with the hospital director yesterday and I got his approval, but it\'s only for a period of three months. However, he promised to allow me to go on a visiting scholarship for one whole year after two years. 

I hope it\'s not too much to ask, but can you possibly accept me as a visiting scholar for 3 months sometime next year? I can only get the grant from the Korean government in case you accept me. I know this is a difficult request since 3 months is such a short time to do something. I have a proposal which is to send my own specimen to the laboratory before my arrival then once I get there, I can analyze it using my own fund. Hopefully, I can get everything done before the three month period is finished.  I think I can go for another visit for one whole year after my new hospital is stabilized which will hopefully happen within the next 2 to 3 years.

I am really sorry to disappoint you. I completely understand the difficult nature of my request, so whatever decision you make, I will take and respect it.  

Best regard,

[이름]