Dear rose,

2018-10-22 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

Dear rose, Thank you for your teaching for today. I have one question. In the last moment, I asked one question about one paragraph. I completly understand what you were saying before. On evaluation paper, you have written it very politely. ***** It means some countries are just concerned about the money they get, and they don't invest this money wisely. This donation includes money to be used in education and health schemes, and these countries unfortunately care about the quantity only. In other words, instead of investing this money responsibly and wisely, they just receive the money instead of investing it in their people effectively.***** According to above paragraph, what I mentioned before is wrong. In today class, I told you that......The countries which focus on the quantity of investment just want to be invested from another countries. and..they don't take responsiblity. => Is it correct?

강사 첨삭

Thanks for clarifying the vague part of the lesson, [이름]~

Dear rose,
>>
Dear [Name], 
Thank you for your teaching for today.
>>
Thank you for your teaching today.
I have one question. In the last moment, I asked one question about one paragraph.
>>CORRECT!
I completly understand what you were saying before.
>>
I completely understand what you were saying before. 
On evaluation paper, you have written it very politely.
>>CORRECT!
*****
It means some countries are just concerned about the money they get, and they don\'t invest this money wisely.

 This donation includes money to be used in education and health schemes, and these countries unfortunately care about the quantity only.
In other words, instead of investing this money responsibly and wisely, they just receive the money instead of investing it in their people effectively.*****
>>CORRECT!
According to above paragraph, what I mentioned before is wrong.
>>
According to above paragraph, what I mentioned before was wrong.
In today class, I told you that......The countries which focus on the quantity of investment just want to be invested from another countries.

>>On today\'s class, I told you that, \"the countries which focus on the quantity of investment just want to be invested from other countries\".
 and..they don\'t take responsiblity. => Is it correct?

>>CORRECT!


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