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2018-11-26 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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Hi Dianne. This is my homework today. "Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you ag[이름]?" I don't think that giving money to homeless is the best way. Money is not everything. If we give them money u​nquestioningly, homeless will increase. For the purpose of solving the problem, we need to provide a self-supporting environment. First of all we have listen their story and we also have to find what they can do or what they want to do.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Jane!


I totally ag[이름] with you.

If we give them money, then they are going to be dependent and lazy.

You\'re right, we have to or the government to help them have a self-supporting environment.

Great ideas my dear! Keep the ideas flowing!

Have a great day!


_Teacher Dianne


Hi Dianne.

>> correct
 This is my homework today.

>> correct
 \"Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you ag[이름]?\"
>> correct


 I don\'t think that giving money to homeless is the best way.

>> correct
 Money is not everything.

>> correct
 If we give them money unquestioningly, homeless will increase.

>> If we give them money unquestioningly, the number of homeless people will increase.
 For the purpose of solving the problem, we need to provide a self-supporting environment.

>> correct
 First of all we have listen their story and we also have to find what they can do or what they want to do.

>> First of all, we have to listen to their story and we also have to find what they can do or what they want to do. 

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