\"Death is not a period, but a comma, in the story of life.

2020-05-22 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

This sentence reminded me of the word karma. Sometimes, I hope that we can born again later (after die) In this world, I can\\\'t define a good person or a bad person, but good and evil certainly exist. I believe that if I live as a good person and do something kind and good for other people and animals even my self, after I dead, I can be born in a better environment with great parents. I think we should believe that I mentioned. because, people will do better if they believe that they could be born a better in the future, they want to do good behavior and trying to be good person. there are some people who are very sad and depress, because of the disease, poverty,war even not their fault. but if they aren\\\'t believe Karma, They just live dark life and it\\\'s just one chance live forever. that\\\'s unfair and very poor .. so I want they can live more happy and good life a next life. if that could be possible.^^

강사 첨삭

Good evening [이름]-Li!
Thank you for finding the time to answer our essay question even if your schedule is always busy.
I wish reincarnation is real too.

It would be really great if everyone is given a second chance at life. 
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.
See you later in class. ^^
~Charry 


This sentence reminded me of the word karma.

>> CORRECT!
Sometimes, I hope that we can born again later (after die)

>> Sometimes, I hope that we can be born again later after we die.
In this world, I can\\\'t define a good person or a bad person, but good and evil certainly exist.

>> In this world, I can\'t define a good person or a bad person, but good and evil certainly exist.
I believe that if I live as a good person and do something kind and good for other people and animals even my self, after I dead, I can be born in a better environment with great parents.

>> I believe that if I live as a good person and do something kind and good for other people, animals and even for my self, I can be reborn in a better environment with great parents.
I think we should believe that I mentioned.

>> I think people should believe what I have mentioned.
because, people will do better if they believe that they could be born a better in the future, they want to do good behavior and trying to be good person.

>> It\'s because people will do better if they believe that they could be reborn with a better future. They would want to show good behavior and try to be a good person.
there are some people who are very sad and depress, because of the disease, poverty,war even not their fault.
>> There are some people who are very sad and depressed because of a disease, poverty, war and even with things that are not their fault.

but if they aren\\\'t believe Karma, They just live dark life and it\\\'s just one chance live forever.

>> But if they don\'t believe in Karma, they would just live a dark life with a belief that they only live once.
that\\\'s unfair and very poor .. so I want they can live more happy and good life a next life. 

>> That\'s unfair and very sad. So, I want them to live a happier and better life in their next life.
if that could be possible.^^

>> I hope that could be possible. ^^

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