Dec.23

2011-12-23 · 첨삭 강사 Razel

학생이 쓴 원문

How many times have you moved? I don't like moving which bothers me to organize many things. But as far as i've experienced moving about three times. What do you usually do on your birthday? my last birthday i didn't do anything special. I just ate some food which made me tasty so that i always thank for my mom. And then,My parents always give me some money to buy something special. But I didn't buy something that i just saved that money by little by little to buy big goods like expensive watch. What are you picky about? Normally I'm not a picky person but i'm careful to make friends to strange people because i was betrayed to many people. At that time,I was hurt like tearing skin so that i always try to have good senses. But i know it's not easy. First of all,I'll be a good person. Do you like your job? I don't have any jobs. nowadays i'm bumming. but i'm not looking for any jobs. I just take a break.Many people want to get high salary jobs to make alot money.

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Hello :) Advance Merry Christmas! Thank you for the composition. You did a great job! Have a happy weekend!   How many times have you moved? >>CORRECTI don\'t like moving which bothers me to organize many things. >>I don\'t like moving because it bothers me in organizing many things.But as far as i\'ve experienced moving about three times. >>But as far as I know, I had experienced moving three times.What do you usually do on your birthday? >CORRECTmy last birthday i didn\'t do anything special. >>I didn\'t do anything special on my last birthday.I just ate some food which made me tasty so that i always thank for my mom. >>I just ate some tasty food cooked by my mom.And then,My parents always give me some money to buy something special.>>Then, my parents gave me some money ,as always, to buy something special. But I didn\'t buy something that i just saved that money by little by little to buy big goods like expensive watch. >>But I didn\'t buy something. I just saved that money  in order to buy an expensive watch. What are you picky about? >>CORRECTNormally I\'m not a picky person but i\'m careful to make friends to strange people because i was betrayed to many people. >>Normally,I\'m not a choosy person but I\'m careful in making friends because I was betrayed by many people before.At that time,I was hurt like tearing skin so that i always try to have good senses. >>At that time I was so hurt that\'s why I always try to be extra careful.But I know it\'s not easy. >>CORRECTFirst of all,I\'ll be a good person. >>CORRECTDo you like your job? >>CORRECTI don\'t have any jobs. nowadays i\'m bumming. but i\'m not looking for any jobs. >>As for me, I don\'t have any job right now and I\'m not looking for any.I just take a break.Many people want to get high salary jobs to make alot money. >>I\'m just takin a break.Many people want to have high salary jobs to make a lot of money.

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