Dec.23
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How many times have you moved?
I don't like moving which bothers me to organize many things.
But as far as i've experienced moving about three times.
What do you usually do on your birthday?
my last birthday i didn't do anything special.
I just ate some food which made me tasty so that i always thank for my mom.
And then,My parents always give me some money to buy something special.
But I didn't buy something that i just saved that money by little by little to buy big goods like expensive watch.
What are you picky about?
Normally I'm not a picky person but i'm careful to make friends to strange people because i was betrayed to many people.
At that time,I was hurt like tearing skin so that i always try to have good senses.
But i know it's not easy.
First of all,I'll be a good person.
Do you like your job?
I don't have any jobs. nowadays i'm bumming. but i'm not looking for any jobs.
I just take a break.Many people want to get high salary jobs to make alot money.
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How many times have you moved?
>>CORRECTI don\'t like moving which bothers me to organize many things.
>>I don\'t like moving because it bothers me in organizing many things.But as far as i\'ve experienced moving about three times.
>>But as far as I know, I had experienced moving three times.What do you usually do on your birthday?
>CORRECTmy last birthday i didn\'t do anything special.
>>I didn\'t do anything special on my last birthday.I just ate some food which made me tasty so that i always thank for my mom.
>>I just ate some tasty food cooked by my mom.And then,My parents always give me some money to buy something special.>>Then, my parents gave me some money ,as always, to buy something special.
But I didn\'t buy something that i just saved that money by little by little to buy big goods like expensive watch.
>>But I didn\'t buy something. I just saved that money in order to buy an expensive watch.
What are you picky about?
>>CORRECTNormally I\'m not a picky person but i\'m careful to make friends to strange people because i was betrayed to many people.
>>Normally,I\'m not a choosy person but I\'m careful in making friends because I was betrayed by many people before.At that time,I was hurt like tearing skin so that i always try to have good senses.
>>At that time I was so hurt that\'s why I always try to be extra careful.But I know it\'s not easy.
>>CORRECTFirst of all,I\'ll be a good person.
>>CORRECTDo you like your job?
>>CORRECTI don\'t have any jobs. nowadays i\'m bumming. but i\'m not looking for any jobs.
>>As for me, I don\'t have any job right now and I\'m not looking for any.I just take a break.Many people want to get high salary jobs to make alot money.
>>I\'m just takin a break.Many people want to have high salary jobs to make a lot of money.
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