Define gender equality. What are the factors that should be taken into account to achieve equality i
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Gender equality means that women and men, and girls and boys, enjoy the same rights, resources, opportunities and protections. It does not require that girls and boys, or women and men be the same, or that they be treated exactly alike. There have been a lot of trials to achieve gender equality. I believe that there has been improvement compare to the past but we still have numerous issues to be controversial. In my opinion, first of all, people have to admit the differences between men and women naturally. Men tend to ignore women\'s abilities physically but women can also do most of things that men do. They can fullfill their mission very well as a soldier and play sports like men. Secondly, I believe that it is the most important to give same opportunities on all kind of aspects. Fairness is the major topic which especially, young people are interested in. I know that there still are a lot of unfairness and discremination among the people. Rich people usually have more chance than po
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~ T. CamilleGender equality means that women and men, and girls and boys, enjoy the same rights, resources, opportunities and protections.
>> CORRECT! It does not require that girls and boys, or women and men be the same, or that they be treated exactly alike.
>> CORRECT! There have been a lot of trials to achieve gender equality.
>> CORRECT! I believe that there has been improvement compare to the past but we still have numerous issues to be controversial.
>> CORRECT! In my opinion, first of all, people have to admit the differences between men and women naturally.
>> CORRECT! Men tend to ignore women\'s abilities physically but women can also do most of things that men do.
>> CORRECT! They can fullfill their mission very well as a soldier and play sports like men.
>> They can fulfill their mission very well as a soldier and play sports like men.
Secondly, I believe that it is the most important to give same opportunities on all kind of aspects.
>> Secondly, I believe that it is important to give same opportunities on all kind of aspects.
Fairness is the major topic which especially, young people are interested in.
>> CORRECT! I know that there still are a lot of unfairness and discremination among the people.
>> I know that there still are a lot of unfairness and discrimination among the people.
Rich people usually have more chance than po
>> Rich people usually have more chance than poor people.
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