Depressed Life by Sudden Allergy

2020-05-05 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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In my case, food decides mood. If I suddenly become allergic to my favorite food, my life would be generally depressing. First, I will be no longer an energetic person, for I feel hopeful and powerful when I eat food I like. For example, I know happiness through preparing my meals with favorite foods, and I search for the effect of each food so I can realize how these foods will work in my body. Afterward, I am satisfied with the fact I eat healthy foods. Apples, bananas, yogurt are my favorite food which also keeps me healthy. Second, I may get stressed, because I become less efficient in my assignments when I do not drink coffee. Drinking coffee is already a routine of my life. When I drink it, I can stay focused on tasks for a long time. Also, I\'d like to savor its scent and taste, since there are lots of kinds of coffee. When I feel exhausted, I have a sweet latte so that I can recover my condition to live a productive day. To sum up, a sudden allergy will make my life depressing.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Su [이름]. ^^ 

Great job in answering our homework for today!
I personally cannot live without coffee either. :D
Thank you for sharing your love for food. 
I am excited to continue our classes in the next coming days. 

~t. Ally


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In my case, food decides mood. 
>> In my case, food decides my mood.

If I suddenly become allergic to my favorite food, my life would be generally depressing. 
>> CORRECT!

First, I will be no longer an energetic person, for I feel hopeful and powerful when I eat food I like. 
>> First, I will no longer be an energetic person because I feel hopeful and powerful when I eat the food that I like.

For example, I know happiness through preparing my meals with favorite foods, and I search for the effect of each food so I can realize how these foods will work in my body. 
>> CORRECT!

Afterward, I am satisfied with the fact I eat healthy foods. 
>> CORRECT!

Apples, bananas, yogurt are my favorite food which also keeps me healthy. 
>> Apples, bananas, and yogurt are my favorite food, all of which also keeps me healthy. 

Second, I may get stressed, because I become less efficient in my assignments when I do not drink coffee. 
>> Second, I may get stressed, because I become less efficient in doing my assignments when I do not drink coffee.

Drinking coffee is already a routine of my life. 
>> Drinking coffee is already a routine in my life.

When I drink it, I can stay focused on tasks for a long time. 
>> CORRECT!

Also, I\'d like to savor its scent and taste, since there are lots of kinds of coffee. 
>> CORRECT!

When I feel exhausted, I have a sweet latte so that I can recover my condition to live a productive day. 
>> When I feel exhausted, I have a sweet latte so that I can recover from my current condition and live a productive day. 

To sum up, a sudden allergy will make my life depressing.
>> CORRECT!

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