: Describe a famous person you admire.
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I admire Burak Obama who was a President of the United State.
He is an African American.Nevertheless, he overcame the prejudice and was elected as a president.
He has an excellent skill of conversation and emphasized an international cooperation.
At that time,I thought his facial expression and attitude were very impressive.
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I admire Burak Obama who was a President of the United State.>> I admire Barack Obama who was a President of the United States.
He is an African American.
He is an African American.
>> He is African-American.
Nevertheless, he overcame the prejudice and was elected as a president.
>> Nevertheless, he overcame the prejudice and was elected as president.
He has an excellent skill of conversation and emphasized an international cooperation.
He has an excellent skill of conversation and emphasized an international cooperation.
>> He has excellent communication skills and he emphasized international cooperation.
At that time,I thought his facial expression and attitude were very impressive.
At that time,I thought his facial expression and attitude were very impressive.
>> At that time, I thought his facial expressions and attitude were very impressive.
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