Describe a friend who has played an important part in your life.
학생이 쓴 원문
You should mention: How you met this person/ How long you have known the person/ The things you do or have done together/ Why this person has been important in your life
I want to introduce a close friend of mine. His name is Sanghun, and he is 8 years older than me. I met him 5 years ago during my military service at Cheongju Air Base. At that time, I was under hard time struggling to adjust the environment. Since he was my peer, I became close with him and was able to get many advice. Most of my friends are similar ages or from the same s[이름]ol, though I felt very comfortable with him. He helped me deal with various situations, like from how to handle myself wisely, to navigate social situations well. Thanks to his job, a s[이름]ol teacher, his helps and advice were really effective and I was able to mature after overcoming many things and finishing my service successfully. Even today, I sometimes meet him and spend time eating together or going to concerts. He\'s a precious person to me.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
Sanghun really does sound like a role model, someone who gave you wisdom when you needed it most and continues to be a steady presence in your life. You described him warmly and clearly, and I can see how his guidance during military service helped you mature. It’s wonderful that you still meet him today; that shows how lasting and meaningful the bond is.
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
I want to introduce a close friend of mine. His name is Sanghun, and he is 8 years older than me.
~ CORRECT.
I met him 5 years ago during my military service at Cheongju Air Base.
~ CORRECT.
At that time, I was under hard time struggling to adjust the environment.
~ At that time, I was having a hard time struggling to adjust to the environment.
Since he was my peer, I became close with him and was able to get many advice.
~ Since he was my peer, I became close with him and was able to get much advice.
Most of my friends are similar ages or from the same s[이름]ol, though I felt very comfortable with him.
~ CORRECT.
He helped me deal with various situations, like from how to handle myself wisely, to navigate social situations well.
~ He helped me deal with various situations, from how to handle myself wisely to how to navigate social situations well.
Thanks to his job, a s[이름]ol teacher, his helps and advice were really effective and I was able to mature after overcoming many things and finishing my service successfully.
~ Thanks to his job as a s[이름]ol teacher, his help and advice were really effective, and I was able to mature after overcoming many things and finishing my service successfully.
Even today, I sometimes meet him and spend time eating together or going to concerts.
~ CORRECT.
He\'s a precious person to me.
~ CORRECT.
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