Describe a friend who you had at school.

2018-06-15 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

학생이 쓴 원문

I would like to describe a friend of mine who met in a college. I entered the college 2 years later than her so I'm older so I thought we couldn't be a best friend like this but she is a very charming and outgoing person. It wasn't big deal how could become a best friend. She is taller than me and bigger than my hands and feet. So when we are walking together she looks like my old sister. We have a lot in common such as humor, taste of food and hobbies. So we talked a bit and became more closer. We did it something a lot whice were worked a same place like pub, and our assignment. Having our assignment, she's got an leadership so she towared ours more good way. And now, we still are seeing often. We still maintaine our friendship in good condition and I hope we can be the best friend like this forever.

강사 첨삭

Hello Mini! Thank you dear for sending your essay. That is a nice friendship you have with that girl. You have to both take care of it because it\'s not easy to find a good friend these days.
~T. IRENE~
I would like to describe a friend of mine who met in a college.
>>> I would like to describe a friend of mine who I met in a college.
I entered the college 2 years later than her so I\'m older so I thought we couldn\'t be a best friend like this but she is a very charming and outgoing person.
>>> I entered college 2 years earlier than her so I\'m older. I thought we couldn\'t be best friends because of that but she is a very charming and outgoing so we became very close.
It wasn\'t big deal how could become a best friend.
>>> Our age gap was not a big deal for us becoming best friends.
She is taller than me and bigger than my hands and feet.
>>> She is taller than me and has bigger hands and feet.
So when we are walking together she looks like my old sister.
>>> So when we are walking together she looks like my older sister.
We have a lot in common such as humor, taste of food and hobbies.
>>> We have a lot in common such as humor, taste in food and hobbies.
So we talked a bit and became more closer.
>>> So we talked a bit and became closer.
We did it something a lot whice were worked a same place like pub, and our assignment.
>>> We met a lot and did things together like go to the pub or finish an assignment.
Having our assignment, she\'s got an leadership so she towared ours more good way.
>>> While working together, I have noticed that she has a leadership ability.
And now, we still are seeing often.
>>> Until now, we often see each other.
We still maintaine our friendship in good condition and I hope we can be the best friend like this forever.
>>> We have still maintained a close friendship that I hope will last forever.
>>> We are still friends until now and I hope it will stay that way forever.






 




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