Describe a memorable holiday you have had. Where did you go? What did you do? Why was it memorable?
학생이 쓴 원문
When the Sul-nal that the lunar new years day is coming, I went to my grandparent\'s house and I met relatives.
We took a bow that is official greeting for new years day and then parents and adults give me money.
This custom was important event when I was child.
강사 첨삭
Hey [이름]! I heard this holiday is more on spending time with the family and children do enjoy this holiday because they are given money. Thank you for sharing your experience.
~~ Teacher Ryka^^
When the Sul-nal that the lunar new years day is coming, I went to my grandparent\'s house and I met relatives.
>> During the Seollal or Lunar New year, I would go to my grandparent\'s house and met with my relatives.
We took a bow that is official greeting for new years day and then parents and adults give me money.
>> We bowed which is the official greeting during the New Years day and the adults would also give me money.
This custom was important event when I was child.
>> This was an important custom when I was a child.
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