Describe a person who inspires you.
학생이 쓴 원문
A person who insipires me is Elon Musk.
I think he is a man who can see the future.
And he continues to work hard for the future of humanity even though he is already super rich.
Throught Youtube, I found that he even slept in his office in order to work much.
He is a person who try to study and work for the development of human.
I think Elon Musk is the very essential person for our globe and Earth.
Because of him, I want to think more broadly and become a person who doesn\'t stop learning like him.
강사 첨삭
Hi Serena!
I hope you\'re enjoying your holiday.
Thank you for your composition.
Take note of spelling mistakes and complicated patterns.
I changed some sentences to make the flow smoother and more natural.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
A person who insipires me is Elon Musk.
>> A person who inspires me is Elon Musk.
I think he is a man who can see the future.
I think he is a man who can see the future.
>> Correct
And he continues to work hard for the future of humanity even though he is already super rich.
And he continues to work hard for the future of humanity even though he is already super rich.
>> He continues to work hard for the future of humanity even though he is already super rich.
Throught Youtube, I found that he even slept in his office in order to work much.
Throught Youtube, I found that he even slept in his office in order to work much.
>> Through YouTube, I learned that he even slept in his office in order to work more.
He is a person who try to study and work for the development of human.
He is a person who try to study and work for the development of human.
>> He is a person who tries to study and work for the development of humanity.
I think Elon Musk is the very essential person for our globe and Earth.
I think Elon Musk is the very essential person for our globe and Earth.
>> I think Elon Musk is a very important person for our world.
Because of him, I want to think more broadly and become a person who doesn\'t stop learning like him.
Because of him, I want to think more broadly and become a person who doesn\'t stop learning like him.
>> Because of him, I want to think more broadly and become someone who never stops learning like him.
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