Describe a place you will never forget? and why ?
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name],
When I was child about 10 years old, I lived a farming area. There was no building and factory near by my house. So I could swim in the stream by my house.
I could drink any water near spring.
We took care of some cows and hens, sheeps, pigs.
I was very happy to see them.
When I wake up in the morning, I went to find egg in hen\'s house. That was very joyful for me.
We have everything of convenience now
But I have no joy to feel the nature.
My son play game and he watch movie on TV easily.
Eating ready made food.
I miss my child time.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! :)
I could drink any water near spring.
We took care of some cows and hens, sheeps, pigs.
I was very happy to see them.
When I wake up in the morning, I went to find egg in hen\'s house.
But I have no joy to feel the nature.
My son play game and he watch movie on TV easily.
Eating ready made food.
I miss my child time.
I appreciate your effort in writing a composition.
Have a wonderful day. :)
- Tricia
Dear [Name],
When I was child about 10 years old, I lived a farming area.
When I was child about 10 years old, I lived a farming area.
>> When I was a child about 10 years old, I lived in a farming area.
There was no building and factory near by my house.
>> There was no building and factory near my house.
So I could swim in the stream by my house.
>> So, I could swim in the stream by my house.
I could drink any water near spring.
>> I could drink any water near the spring.
We took care of some cows and hens, sheeps, pigs.
>> We took care of some cows, hens, sheep, and pigs.
I was very happy to see them.
>> CORRECT!
When I wake up in the morning, I went to find egg in hen\'s house.
>> When I wake up in the morning, I go to find eggs in the hen\'s house.
That was very joyful for me.
>> Those were very joyful experiences for me.
We have everything of convenience now
>> We have the convenience of everything now.
But I have no joy to feel the nature.
>> But I can\'t feel the happiness that nature gives.
My son play game and he watch movie on TV easily.
>> My son plays games and watches movie on TV anytime.
Eating ready made food.
>> He also eats ready-made food.
I miss my child time.
>> I miss my childhood days.
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