Describe a risk you have taken which had a positive result
학생이 쓴 원문
The biggest challenge was applying for a work position in Japan. I have decided to take it because I would like to extend my career where I graduated from university. There were many difficulties because I needed to write down my resume and interview in Japanese, which was difficult for native speakers. Eventually, I fail to get a job in Japan, but I have managed to get a foreign company position, which I get to in charge of Japanese clients. There is an adage which “Opportunities does not send letters of introduction.” I felt devastated when I had to graduate from university without any job offer. However, readiness opened a new chance to me, which could be an essential foundation in my professional career.
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Here\'s another edited composition, Aciel!
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Jean~~
The biggest challenge was applying for a work position in Japan.
>> The biggest challenge I experienced was applying for a job in Japan.
I have decided to take it because I would like to extend my career where I graduated from university.
>> I have decided to take it because I would like to build my career in the place where I graduated from university.
There were many difficulties because I needed to write down my resume and interview in Japanese, which was difficult for native speakers.
>> Writing down my resume and interviewing in Japanese, which was difficult for native speakers, were some of the difficulties I encountered at that time.
Eventually, I fail to get a job in Japan, but I have managed to get a foreign company position, which I get to in charge of Japanese clients.
>> Eventually, I failed to get a job in Japan, but I have managed to get a position in a foreign company, wherein I\'m in charge of Japanese clients.
There is an adage which “Opportunities does not send letters of introduction.” I felt devastated when I had to graduate from university without any job offer.
>> There is an adage that goes, “Opportunities do not send letters of introduction.” I felt devastated when I had to graduate from university without any job offer.
However, readiness opened a new chance to me, which could be an essential foundation in my professional career.
>> However, my state of preparedness opened a new chance to me, which could be an essential foundation for my professional career.
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