describe a sprts star you admire

One sports star whom I look up to is Michael Jordan. He is a well-known NBA basketball player. He has exceptional basketball skills. For instance, he can score goals while under time presure. He also shoot from almost anywhere in the court. In addition, he can leap very well, which is why he makes great slam dunks. Moreover, he is also good at playing basketball defense. In fact, he is the first NBA player to win both the Defensive Player award and MVP award in the same year. I believe this is not an easy achievment for many basketball players. Other than that, he has won five MVP awards to date. I want to meet him because he is an inspiration to youth.

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