Describe a typical family unit and the importance of family in your country.
학생이 쓴 원문
There are some family units considered as ideal in Korea which are composed of both parents and one or two of their kids.
But I think the concept of \"ideal family\" should be broken as there are diverse family units like lone parent family, a one-person family and DINK and we shouldn\'t appraisal what kinds of family units are better and worse than the others.
Koreans have a strong bond between family members and parent\'s supports to their kids last longer.
For me, I am independent from our parents in economy but I am still accepting many supports from my mother in other parts of my life.
강사 첨삭
Great job sharing your thoughts on the topic, [이름]. It is very impressive as always. Keep up the great work and I look forward to our class. Keep them coming. ~ teacher Jane c\",)
There are some family units considered as ideal in Korea which are composed of both parents and one or two of their kids.
>>> CORRECT =)
But I think the concept of \"ideal family\" should be broken as there are diverse family units like lone parent family, a one-person family and DINK and we shouldn\'t appraisal what kinds of family units are better and worse than the others.
>>> But I think the concept of \"ideal family\" should be broken down as there are diverse family units like lone parent family, a one-person family, and DINK and we shouldn\'t do an appraisal of what kinds of family units are better and worse than others.
Koreans have a strong bond between family members and parent\'s supports to their kids last longer.
>>> CORRECT =)
For me, I am independent from our parents in economy but I am still accepting many supports from my mother in other parts of my life.
>>> For me, I am independent from our parents financially but I am still accepting/ receiving many kinds of support from my mother in other parts/ areas of my life.
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