Describe about Korean art.
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion Korean art is beauty of empty. From old times, Our ancestors considered empty and concise important. So even they could make the best celadon in the world they became to make white porcelain with concise but beauty. It is hard work to make beauty with concise.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Thomas!
How have you been? I am so sorry that I could not meet you in class but I am so grateful that you did your homework. I truly appreciate all your efforts.
Anyway, I can see very meaningful sentences that you have made below and I congratulate you for the very good choice of vocabulary as well as insights that you have shared. Keep up the very good work!
Please go over my suggestions as well.
See you soon in class!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!!!
Or: In my opinion, Korean art is the beauty of emptiness.
From old times, Our ancestors considered empty and concise important.
>> From old times, our ancestors considered emptiness and conciseness important.
So even they could make the best celadon in the world they became to make white porcelain with concise but beauty.
>> So even if they could make the best celadon in the world, they made white porcelain with conciseness but with beauty.
It is hard work to make beauty with concise.
>> It is hard work to make beauty with conciseness.
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