Describe how you have demonstrated leadership ability both in and out of school

2017-05-25 · 첨삭 강사 Travis

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To be honest I was born having characteristic which is introverted. I used to worried about what must have happened or not, although that is so the trivial thing that everyone doesn't care about it. So I pretend to be a energetic person while get along with around people. I also can demonstrated leadership ability on my way just in case nobody doesn’t stand up for some opinions. When I meet with my best friends and stay with familiar people who know me I can do everything what I want. Especially I used to be a team leader of the game in recreation and they believe in me to get scores to win the prize. These are ordinary things to find out easily in our life but I have been thinking that it makes me much stronger if those are gained to lots of experiences. Therefore I have determined to act even trivial things so that it will be helpful for my confidence and leadership ability.

강사 첨삭

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Teacher Travis.


To be honest I was born having characteristic which is introverted.
>>Correct.

>>OR: To be honest I\'m introvert when I was born.
 I used to worried about what must have happened or not, although that is so the trivial thing that everyone doesn\'t care about it.
>>I was worrying about what must have happened or not,
although that is so the trivial thing that everyone doesn\'t care about.
So I pretend to be a energetic person while get along with around people.
>>So I pretend to be a lively person while a get along with people.
I also can demonstrated leadership ability on my way just in case nobody doesn’t stand up for some opinions.
>>I can also demonstrate leadership ability on my way just in case 
nobody doesn’t stand up for some opinions. 
When I meet with my best friends and stay with familiar people who know me I can do everything what I want.
>>When I meet my best friends and stay with familiar people who knows me that I can do everything what I want.
Especially I used to be a team leader of the game in recreation and they believe in me to get scores to win the prize.
>>Correct.
These are ordinary things to find out easily in our life but I have been thinking that it makes me much stronger if those are gained to lots of experiences.
>>Correct.

>>OR: These are the ordinary things to find out easily in our life but I\'ve been thinking that it makes more stronger if those are gained to lots of experiences.
 Therefore I have determined to act even trivial things so that it will be helpful for my confidence and leadership ability.

>>Correct.

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