Describe myself

2017-10-12 · 첨삭 강사 Amanda

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I have no idea how to start. Let`s try anyway. 1. I like meeting new people. When I had been in Aus. I prefer to stay in backpacker than in hotel. Hotel has a lot of advantages, It is comfortable, clean and well organized. Backpacker doesn`t have that. But It has a lot of chances to meet new people. I can hear numerous story from all over the world. 2. I like to listen music, make music as well. I start to music with playing drums. Playing drum is so exciting with countless adrenalin. Afterward, I played keyboard, guitar, percussions an so on. I like to listen music from classic to Metal. Genre isn`t matter. Good music is good music. 3. I like to being lonely. More specific. I like to have time of myself. Just concentrate my energy on myself with doing nothing. 4. I like to hug. I like body heat. I like heart beating. 5. I love myself. I love who loves me. 6. I like wind and rain.

강사 첨삭


Hi Lion! How are you!

Wow! You said that you don\'t have any idea how to start but you sure have good ideas what to write. :)

I like it that you focused on the things that you like instead of on the things that you dislike.

It\'s a good indication of how optimistic you are as a person.


See you tomorrow!

Amanda ^-^


I have no idea how to start. Let\'s try, anyway.

>> Correct
1. I like meeting new people. When I had been in Aus. I prefer to stay in backpacker than in hotel. 

>> I like meeting new people. When I was in Australia, I preferred staying in a backpacker than in a hotel. 


Hotel has a lot of advantages, it is comfortable, clean and well organized. 

>> Correct
Backpacker doesn`t have that. But It has a lot of chances to meet new people. I can hear numerous story from all over the world.
>> A backpacker doesn\'t have that, but it gives you opportunities to meet new people.


 2. I like to listen music, make music as well. I start to music with playing drums.

>> I like listening to music. I write songs too. I first pursued my love of music by playing the drums.


Playing drum is so exciting with countless adrenalin. Afterward, I played keyboard, guitar, percussions an so on. 

>> Playing the drums is so exciting. I gives me adrenalin surge.


I like to listen music from classic to Metal. Genre isn`t matter. Good music is good music.
>> I like to listen to all sorts of music, from classic to metal. Genre doesn\'t matter. Good music is good music.


3. I like to being lonely. More specific. I like to have time of myself. Just concentrate my energy on myself with doing nothing.
>> I like being alone. I like to have time for myself. Having some time alone energizes me.

4. I like to hug. I like body heat.
>> Correct

I like heart beating. 

>> I like listening to the beating of the heart.


5. I love myself. I love who loves me.

>> I love myself. I love anyone who loves me.

 6. I like wind and rain.

>> Correct

>> OR: Wind and rain fascinates me.


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