Describe myself
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Hi Lion! How are you!
Wow! You said that you don\'t have any idea how to start but you sure have good ideas what to write. :)
I like it that you focused on the things that you like instead of on the things that you dislike.
It\'s a good indication of how optimistic you are as a person.
See you tomorrow!
Amanda ^-^
I have no idea how to start. Let\'s try, anyway.
>> Correct
1. I like meeting new people. When I had been in Aus. I prefer to stay in backpacker than in hotel.
>> I like meeting new people. When I was in Australia, I preferred staying in a backpacker than in a hotel.
Hotel has a lot of advantages, it is comfortable, clean and well organized.
>> Correct
Backpacker doesn`t have that. But It has a lot of chances to meet new people. I can hear numerous story from all over the world.
>> A backpacker doesn\'t have that, but it gives you opportunities to meet new people.
2. I like to listen music, make music as well. I start to music with playing drums.
>> I like listening to music. I write songs too. I first pursued my love of music by playing the drums.
Playing drum is so exciting with countless adrenalin. Afterward, I played keyboard, guitar, percussions an so on.
>> Playing the drums is so exciting. I gives me adrenalin surge.
I like to listen music from classic to Metal. Genre isn`t matter. Good music is good music.
>> I like to listen to all sorts of music, from classic to metal. Genre doesn\'t matter. Good music is good music.
3. I like to being lonely. More specific. I like to have time of myself. Just concentrate my energy on myself with doing nothing.
>> I like being alone. I like to have time for myself. Having some time alone energizes me.
4. I like to hug. I like body heat.
>> Correct
I like heart beating.
>> I like listening to the beating of the heart.
5. I love myself. I love who loves me.
>> I love myself. I love anyone who loves me.
6. I like wind and rain.
>> Correct
>> OR: Wind and rain fascinates me.
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