Describe someone you respect deeply.

2018-12-26 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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Q:Describe someone you respect deeply. WOW.. It is very difficult... Sometimes, writing homework make me to many thinking. it's very useful to me but quite challenging. I want to talk to about my father. I am respect my father because He working hard for our family. I think so too, Man has responsible for family. That's Korean culture. He is working as a business man. He loving our family. But, Some of other father is not responsible for family. It is very selfish. They didn't take care about their family. Everyday drinking too much and come back late home. even though they didn't take care about baby. Anyway, I got married 3years ago. I am going to responsible my wife. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!


Thank you for answering the homework question despite your difficulty answering it.

You have a good idea about being a responsible man or father.

I think you are a responsible person.

Have a great day ahead!


_Teacher Dianne


Q:Describe someone you respect deeply.
>> correct


 WOW..
>> Wow!


 It is very difficult...

>> correct


Sometimes, writing homework make me to many thinking.

>> Sometimes, writing homework makes me think deeply.

 it\'s very useful to me but quite challenging.

>> It\'s very useful to me, but quite challenging. (Grammatically correct. Just use proper capitalization and punctuations.)


 I want to talk to about my father.

>>  I want to talk about my father.

 I am respect my father because He working hard for our family.

>> I respect my father because he works hard for our family.

 I think so too, Man has responsible for family.

>> I also think that men have responsibilities to their family.

>> or: I also think that a man has a responsibility to do for his family.

That\'s Korean culture.

>> correct

>> or: That\'s a part of our culture.

>> or: It\'s a stereotype for Korean men.

 He is working as a business man. He loving our family.

>> He is working as a businessman and he loves our family.

 But, Some of other father is not responsible for family.

>> But some fathers are not responsible for their family.
 It is very selfish. They didn\'t take care about their family.

 It is very selfish. They didn\'t take care of their family.

 Everyday drinking too much and come back late home.

>> They drink too much every day and come back home late.
 even though they didn\'t take care about baby.

>> And to think they don\'t even take care of their children.

>> or: And to think they don\'t even take care of their babies.

 Anyway, I got married 3 years ago.

>> correct
 I am going to responsible my wife.

>> I am going to be responsible to my wife.

>> or: I am going to be a responsible husband to my wife.

 Thank you.

>> correct

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