Describe spending a perfect day with your family?What would happen?
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When l was kindergarten my family went on winter vacation at the ski resort named Muju. It is over two hours away a drive from my house. When I arrived there I could see white and shiny snow all over the place there. I touched and dug snow and tried to make a snowman. The accommodation we stayed was a private wooden house with a small yard for my family. We had spent a lot of time together playing with snow in the yard. I remember that I had super fun during that vacation.
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When l was kindergarten my family went on winter vacation at the ski
resort named Muju. It is over two hours away a drive from my house. When
I arrived there I could see white and shiny snow all over the place
there. I touched and dug snow and tried to make a snowman. The
accommodation we stayed was a private wooden house with a small yard for
my family. We had spent a lot of time together playing with snow in
the yard. I remember that I had super fun during that vacation.
>> When l was in kindergarten, my family and I went on winter vacation at the ski
resort named Muju. It is over two hours away from our house by car. When
I arrived there, I could see white and shiny snow all over the place. I touched and dug snow and tried to make a snowman. The
accommodation we stayed was a private wooden house with a small yard for
my family. We had spent a lot of time together playing with snow in
the yard. I remembered that I had super fun during that vacation.
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