Describe successful person.

2020-05-05 · 첨삭 강사 Tricia

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Dear [Name], In my opinion, the definition of success is difficult to speak a word. Because It include a lot of things. Famous name, a lot of money, high level position, respectation. When I was in child, respect is main factor for successful person. But now, it was change. Money is a standard for success. If you have a famous name, but no money, most person don\'t think you are successful person. According to the period of country, the standard of success is change.

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Hello [이름]! :)

Thank you so much for answering your homework.
Have a wonderful day. :)

- Tricia


In my opinion, the definition of success is difficult to speak a word.
>> In my opinion, the definition of success is difficult to put in words.

Because It include a lot of things.
>> Because it includes a lot of things.

Famous name, a lot of money, high level position, respectation.
>> A famous name, a lot of money, with high-level position, expectation.

When I was in child, respect is main factor for successful person. 
>> When I was a child, respect is the main factor for successful person. 

But now, it was change. Money is a standard for success. 
>> But now, it was changed. Money is the standard for success.

If you have a famous name, but no money, most person don\'t think you are successful person.
>> If you have a famous name, but no money, most people don\'t think you are a successful person.

According to the period of country, the standard of success is change.
>> According to the period of every country, the standard of success is changing.

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