Describe the experience of falling in love.

2023-06-02 · 첨삭 강사 Mika

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You know Mika?, I had the dates four times. Those were because all of them liked me and confessed to me. But, I have an experience that it had a crush. I really loved her who is beautiful, having a positive mind, and having a skill to raise the other person\'s self-esteem. So, I used to care of her whenever I am. Like giving a present, side dish and making something why I want to meet with her. At some day, I made a confession to her that you\'ve been taking my mind and I got fall in your eyes by now. *I\'ll let you know the next content in class. :)

강사 첨삭

Happy Friday, Elic! You are interested in learning, listens attentively, and makes a solid effort to avoid distractions that could interrupt the learning process. You show responsibility and follows directions whenever they are given. Keep up the good work. AWESOME.

You know Mika?, I had the dates four times.
>>> You know Mika? I dated four times in my life.

Those were because all of them liked me and confessed to me
>>> They were because all of them liked me and confessed to me.

But, I have an experience that it had a crush.
>>> But I have had the experience of having a crush.

I really loved her who is beautiful, having a positive mind, and having a skill to raise the other person\'s self-esteem.
>>> I really loved her because she is beautiful, has a positive mind, and has the skill to raise other people\'s self-esteem.

 So, I used to care of her whenever I am.
>>> So, I used to take care of her whenever I was there.

Like giving a present, side dish and making something why I want to meet with her.
>>> Like giving a present, a side dish, and making something to explain why I want to meet with her.

At some day, I made a confession to her that you\'ve been taking my mind and I got fall in your eyes by now.
>>> Someday, I made a confession to her that you\'ve been taking my mind, and I\'ve fallen in love with your eyes by now.


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