Describe the most interesting person you met on one of your travels.
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was traveling Malaysia about 10years ago, I met man who was a navy in England. He was traveling the world through the money which had earned hard navy life for 10years. He said peace of spirit is important, alpine region of Malaysia(We met the hostel in alpine region of Malaysia) gave him it. So he had been living there for 1month. His daily life was made from walking, meditation, and talking with people who visit the hostel like me. Frankly speaking, at that time, I was a young person who was full of energy and I didn’t know about spirit at all, so I just thought how he would do If his money was gone. But now, I grow up and I can understand him. Now, I think peace of spirit is the most important thing too. In my hard day, sometimes I imagine his peaceful face. He was a the most interesting person in my travel.
강사 첨삭
Hello Saki-San! :)
Thank you so much for answering your homework.
Have a wonderful day. :)
- Tricia
When I was traveling Malaysia about 10years ago, I met man who was a navy in England.
>> When I was traveling in Malaysia about 10 years ago, I met man who was a navy in England.
He was traveling the world through the money which had earned hard navy life for 10years.
>> He was traveling the world using the money he had earned hard in navy for 10 years.
He said peace of spirit is important, alpine region of Malaysia(We met the hostel in alpine region of Malaysia) gave him it.
>> He said having a peaceful spirit is important, the alpine region of Malaysia(We met in a hostel in the alpine region of Malaysia) gave it him.
So he had been living there for 1month.
>> So he had been living there for 1 month.
OR>> So he had been living there for a month.
His daily life was made from walking, meditation, and talking with people who visit the hostel like me.
>> His daily activities were walking, meditating, and talking to people who visit the hostel like me.
Frankly speaking, at that time, I was a young person who was full of energy and I didn’t know about spirit at all, so I just thought how he would do If his money was gone.
>> Frankly speaking, at that time, I was a young person who had full of energy and I didn’t know much about having a peaceful spirit at all, so I just thought how he would do that if his runs out of money.
But now, I grow up and I can understand him.
>> But now that I am old enough, I am able to understand him better.
Now, I think peace of spirit is the most important thing too.
>> Now, I think having a peaceful spirit is one of the most important things too.
In my hard day, sometimes I imagine his peaceful face.
>> In my hard days, I sometimes imagine his peaceful face.
He was a the most interesting person in my travel.
>> He was the most interesting person I have met during my travels.
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