Describe the most popular festival in your town.
학생이 쓴 원문
The annual festival held in my town is the most popular and famous.
The name of the festival is the Gaya Cultural Festival, and since the area where I live was the capital of the country called Gaya a long time ago, it is a festival that celebrates the country and respects the king and queen who founded it.
It is a three-day festival, and there is a museum next to the place where the festival is held, so people take their children to the museum and meet various people. Food trucks come and eat various foods, and it is and event where many foreigners participate, so they also taste foods from other countries.
In this festival, you can experience traditional Korean bow experience or costume experience wearing clothes from that era.
강사 첨삭
Hi!
Thank you for sharing your answer with me.
You did really well in describing your town’s festival! Keep up the good work! ^^
I think it is really nice to learn history as people enjoy a festival. ^^
~ Teacher Gina
The annual festival held in my town is the most popular and famous.
>> The yearly festival in my town is widely known and loved.
>> The yearly festival in my town is widely known and loved.
The name of the festival is the Gaya Cultural Festival, and since the area where I live was the capital of the country called Gaya a long time ago, it is a festival that celebrates the country and respects the king and queen who founded it.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: The Gaya Cultural Festival commemorates the ancient kingdom of Gaya and its rulers, whose capital was once located where I live.
It is a three-day festival, and there is a museum next to the place where the festival is held, so people take their children to the museum and meet various people.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It runs for three days, and there’s a museum nearby where families often go with their children and meet other people.
Food trucks come and eat various foods, and it is and event where many foreigners participate, so they also taste foods from other countries.
>> Food trucks come to the festival, offering a variety of foods. It’s also an event where many foreigners participate, so people get to taste dishes from other countries.
In this festival, you can experience traditional Korean bow experience or costume experience wearing clothes from that era.
>> At this festival, you can try traditional Korean bowing or wear historical costumes from that era.
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