Describe the place where you grow up

2021-07-13 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

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I grow up in Seoul, Korea, In Seoul, there is an amusement park. That name is \'Lotte world\'. When I was a student, I went amusement park after finishing exam. This place is so fun and beautiful. So l like to playing there with my friends. There is a Hangang Park in Seoul. We can eat delivery food in there. So going Hangang park, We can see beautiful river and eat delicious food. I like take a walk with my puppy in Hangang park and ride a bicycle with my friends. After COVID virus is done, I will go Lotte world and Hangang Park with my friends.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]ji!

Nice! I\'m glad to know all these things. You\'re doing good in making sentences. Keep it up!
Thank you for sharing and have a good rest~ ^_^

~T. Roanne ^^
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CORRECTIONS AND SUGGESTIONS:

1. I grow up in Seoul, Korea,
>> I grew up in Seoul, Korea.

2. In Seoul, there is an amusement park. 
>> In Seoul, there is an amusement park.

3. That name is \'Lotte world\'. 
>>  It\'s called as \'Lotte world\'.

4. When I was a student, I went amusement park after finishing exam. 
>> When I was a student, I went to amusement park after finishing my exam. 

5. This place is so fun and beautiful. So l like to playing there with my friends.
>> CORRECT!

6. There is a Hangang Park in Seoul. We can eat delivery food in there. 
>> CORRECT!

7. So going Hangang park, We can see beautiful river and eat delicious food. 
>> So going to the Hangang park, we can see a beautiful river and eat delicious food.

8. I like take a walk with my puppy in Hangang park and ride a bicycle with my friends. 
>> I like to take a walk with my puppy in the Hangang park and ride a bicycle with my friends.

9. After COVID virus is done, I will go Lotte world and Hangang Park with my friends.
>> After the COVID virus is done, I will go to the Lotte World and Hangang Park with my friends.

 

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