Describe your famous person ....
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name].
I did home work late yoday. Sorry for you.
We have a lot of famous persons who you watch on TV. For example BTS who are dance singer and Yeon a Kim who is figure skating and Baseball pitcher Hyun jin Ryu. And as you know, last month, in the Academy award, our movie named \'parasite\' had been received 4 kinds of awards. Supervisor name is Jun ho Bong.
I am his fan. So I am proud of korean and very happy.
Thanks
강사 첨삭
1. We have a lot of famous persons who you watch on TV.
>>CORRECT
OR>>We have a lot of famous persons who you can watch on TV.
2. For example BTS who are dance singer and Yeon a Kim who is figure skating and Baseball pitcher Hyun jin Ryu.
>>For example, BTS who is a K-pop boy group, Yeon a Kim who is a figure skater and baseball pitcher Hyun jin Ryu.
3. And as you know, last month, in the Academy award, our movie named \'parasite\' had been received 4 kinds of awards.
>>And as you know, last month, in the Academy award, our movie named \'parasite\' received 4 kinds of awards.
4. Supervisor name is Jun ho Bong.
>>The director\'s name is Jun ho Bong.
5. I am his fan.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I am a fan of him.
6. So I am proud of korean and very happy.
>> So, I\'m proud to be a Korean and very happy.
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