Describe your favorite room in your home. Why is this your favorite room?
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My favorite room in my house is my own room. My room is the biggest one in my house and my parents willingly let me use this room. This is because I need more furniture than my parents and my younger brother. In my room, there are a bed, a shelf, a desk and chair, a closet, and a dressing table. Originally, I had no desk and chair, but after I entered the graduate school, it became necessary to study at home. So, when my family moved to the house my family live now, I asked my parents to buy it. I utilize it very well now. I am really appriciated to my parents.
In my room, my favorite furniture is a bed because I am unusually sensitive to cold and the bed has a temperature contol system. Thanks to this bed, I can sleep well without feeling a cold. And aother reason I like my room is that it is wide, so I can work out in my room such as strength exercise.
Like this, I can study, work out and take a rest in my room. Thus, I like my room the most in my house.
강사 첨삭
Hi Miss [이름]!
And another homework. I think you are free now. Anyway, thank you for sharing bits of information about your bedroom. You\'ve got a nice bed. ^^
~Kelly^^
My favorite room in my house is my own room.
>> Correct.
>> or: My favorite room in my house is my bedroom.
My room is the biggest one in my house and my parents willingly let me use this room.
>> My room is the biggest one in my house and my parents willingly let me use it.
This is because I need more furniture than my parents and my younger brother.
>> Correct.
In my room, there are a bed, a shelf, a desk and chair, a closet, and a dressing table.
>> In my room, there is a bed, a shelf, a desk, a chair, a closet, and a dresser.
Originally, I had no desk and chair, but after I entered the graduate school, it became necessary to study at home.
>> Correct.
So, when my family moved to the house my family live now, I asked my parents to buy it.
>> So, when my family moved to the house where we are living now, I asked my parents to buy it.
I utilize it very well now.
>> Correct.
I am really appriciated to my parents.
>> I really appreciate my parents very much.In my room, my favorite furniture is a bed because I am unusually sensitive to cold and the bed has a temperature contol system.
>> In my room, my favorite furniture is the bed because I am unusually sensitive to cold and the it has a temperature contol system.
Thanks to this bed, I can sleep well without feeling a cold.
>> Thanks to this bed, I can sleep well without feeling cold.
And aother reason I like my room is that it is wide, so I can work out in my room such as strength exercise.
>> And another reason why I like my room is that it is wide, so I can work out and do strength exercise.Like this, I can study, work out and take a rest in my room.
>> I can study, work out and take a rest in my room.
Thus, I like my room the most in my house.
>> Thus I like my bedroom most in the house.
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