describe your favorite song

That's a tough question. I have so many favorites. But, one of my favorite songs at the moment is a song called 'Always' by Bon jovi . Actually, it's quite an old song but the band has concerts until a recent date. I bought one of their CD's and began listening to them again. I remembered how great their music was and how much I liked that song in particular. When I was 18 years old, I had a rock concert with my friends in a big hall. the band name was grasshopper and then I sang the song. So, Listening to the music, I remember the memory. Also, It's great to sing along with my friends when I drunk or when I go to karaoke. When I listen to it, It helps me forget about any problems I have and It really picks me up and gives me energy. So I love the song

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That's a tough question.

>> Correct

I have so many favorites .

>> Correct

But, one of my favorite songs at the moment is a song called 'Always' by Bon jovi .

>> One of my favorite song at the moment is a song by Bon Jovi with the title “ Always “.

Actually, it's quite an old song but the band has concerts until a recent date.

>> Actually, it’s quite an old song but the band still have concerts even until now.

I bought one of their CD's and began listening to them again.

>> Correct

I remembered how great their music was and how much I liked that song in particular.

>> Correct

When I was 18 years old, I had a rock concert with my friends in a big hall.

>> Correct

the band name was grasshopper and then I sang the song.

>> The name of our band was “ Grasshopper” and I sang the song.
So, Listening to the music, I remember the memory.

>> So, when I listen to the song,  I remember that memory.
Also, It's great to sing along with my friends when I drunk or when I go to karaoke.

>> Also, it’s great to sing along with my friends at a karaoke while drinking.
When I listen to it, It helps me forget about any problems I have and It really picks me up and gives me energy.

>> When I listen to it, it helps me to forget my problems and it also picks up my mood and gives me energy.

 So I love the song

>> Correct.