Describe your ideal garden.

2024-09-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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My ideal garden is natural garden because I like natural feeling, The natural garden has a small pond, various trees and sitting birds on the trees. It also has a clear sky without clouds and cool wind.

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                           Describe your ideal garden.


My ideal garden is natural garden because I like natural feeling,
>> My ideal garden is something that looks natural because I like the natural feeling. 

The natural garden has a small pond, various trees and sitting birds on the trees.
>> The natural garden has a small pond, various trees, and birds sitting on the trees.

It also has a clear sky without clouds and cool wind.
>> OR: The sky is clear and the wind is cool. 

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