Describe your ideal job.

2020-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

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Dear [Name]. Do you satisfy with your job? Many people want to get a job that they hope. But I am sorry, it is very difficult reality. Do you remember my major of the Univetsity? My major is the Korea literature. But my job is the madical sales. It is a complete different part between two majors. My dream was to be a journalist. But it was very difficult situation. Many people who have very good brain try to this contest. I did not try this challenger because I have no self confidence.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]~
Thank you for doing your homework. I appreciate it very much. See you later in class.

Here are your corrections:

Dear [Name].

Do you satisfy with your job?
>> Are you satisfied with your job?

Many people want to get a job that they hope.
>> CORRECT

But I am sorry, it is very difficult reality.
>> But it\'s difficult to get in reality.

Do you remember my major of the Univetsity?
>> Do you remember my major in the university?

My major is the Korea literature.
>> My major was Korean Literature.

But my job is the madical sales.
>> But my current job is medical sales.

It is a complete different part between two majors.
>> It\'s definitely far from my major.

My dream was to be a journalist.
>> CORRECT

But it was very difficult situation.
>> But it was very difficult.

Many people who have very good brain try to this contest. 
>> People that are smart tried to compete in this field.

I did not try this challenger because I have no self confidence.
>> I didn\'t try to compete with them because I have no self confidence.

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