Describe your ideal person.

2015-05-08 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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My ideal person is Steven Spielberg and Nolan.You know I want to be a movie director.They are good movie director.Spielberg made a lot of famous movie.Nolan's way is very good.He plant a vegetables and take care of farm to make interstellar.Steven Spielberg make hit movie especially Jaws,Jurassic Park.I want to become a famous movie director.And I want to make movie the other way. <Movie> I want to be a movie director because I will saw my movie and I want to make who saw my movie they can be fun.I watch a Lorlax and it helps me I get a dream.If I will become movie director I will usually make the animation movie.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank God it\'s Friday! ^^ I hope your doing good. Thank you so much for answering your homework. You did a good job.  However, there were some corrections. So study them okay! I know you can do better.   ~~Teacher Kris   My ideal person is Steven Spielberg and Nolan. >> CORRECT, Just make sure to complete the name of the person. Are you referring to Christopher Nolan? Who is a popular director like Steven Spielberg? ^^ You know I want to be a movie director. >> You know, I want to become a movie director. They are good movie director. >> They are good movie directors. Spielberg made a lot of famous movies. >> CORRECT Nolan\'s way is very good. >> CORRECT He plant a vegetables and take care of farm to make interstellar. >> He has planted vegetables and takes care of the farm to make interstellar. Steven Spielberg make hit movie especially Jaws,Jurassic Park. >> Steven Spielberg makes a hit movie like Jaws and Jurassic Park. I want to become a famous movie director. >> CORRECT And I want to make movie the other way.>> And I want to make a movie on my own way. OR: And I want to make a movie using a different way. I want to be a movie director because I will saw my movie and I want to make who saw my movie they can be fun. >> I want to become a movie director because I want to see my movie and I want people to have fun when they see my movie. I watch a Lorlax and it helps me I get a dream. >> I watched Lorax and it helped me with my dream. If I will become movie director I will usually make the animation movie. >> If I will become a movie director, I will make animation movies.

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