Describe your ideal person.
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My ideal person is Steven Spielberg and Nolan.You know I want to be a movie director.They are good movie director.Spielberg made a lot of famous movie.Nolan's way is very good.He plant a vegetables and take care of farm to make interstellar.Steven Spielberg make hit movie especially Jaws,Jurassic Park.I want to become a famous movie director.And I want to make movie the other way.
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I want to be a movie director because I will saw my movie and I want to make who saw my movie they can be fun.I watch a Lorlax and it helps me I get a dream.If I will become movie director I will usually make the animation movie.
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My ideal person is Steven Spielberg and Nolan.
>> CORRECT, Just make sure to complete the name of the person. Are you referring to Christopher Nolan? Who is a popular director like Steven Spielberg? ^^
You know I want to be a movie director.
>> You know, I want to become a movie director.
They are good movie director.
>> They are good movie directors.
Spielberg made a lot of famous movies.
>> CORRECT
Nolan\'s way is very good.
>> CORRECT
He plant a vegetables and take care of farm to make interstellar.
>> He has planted vegetables and takes care of the farm to make interstellar.
Steven Spielberg make hit movie especially Jaws,Jurassic Park.
>> Steven Spielberg makes a hit movie like Jaws and Jurassic Park.
I want to become a famous movie director.
>> CORRECT
And I want to make movie the other way.>> And I want to make a movie on my own way.
OR: And I want to make a movie using a different way.
I want to be a movie director because I will saw my movie and I want to make who saw my movie they can be fun.
>> I want to become a movie director because I want to see my movie and I want people to have fun when they see my movie.
I watch a Lorlax and it helps me I get a dream.
>> I watched Lorax and it helped me with my dream.
If I will become movie director I will usually make the animation movie.
>> If I will become a movie director, I will make animation movies.
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