Describe your ideal town or city, why you would want to live there, and what you would do there.
학생이 쓴 원문
I prefer to live in a city. What I think the ideal town is as following.
First of all, I want to live in a city with no crime. No crime is a basic element in keeping city life.
Nowadays, we can see many cruel news happened around us. It makes me unhappy.
Secondly, I would like to live in a culture city which can feel artistic everywhere. I hope government set a policy that provide culture benefit to citizen so that every can watch concert, musical, movie at a low price. I think culture give so important influence to people and enhance the level of happiness.
강사 첨삭
A pleasant day to you, [이름]!
How are you feeling now? I hope that you are doing fine.
I totally agree with your thoughts once again. Keep it up!
I am so excited to see you soon! Have a great day!
Teacher Carmen ^^
I prefer to live in a city.
>> Correct!
What I think the ideal town is as following.
>> The characteristics of my ideal town are as follows;
First of all, I want to live in a city with no crime.
>> First of all, I want to live in a city where there are no crimes.
No crime is a basic element in keeping city life.
>> Being in a city where there is no crime is a basic element to have a good life.
Nowadays, we can see many cruel news happened around us.
>> We can see a lot of bad things happening around us nowadays.
It makes me unhappy.
>> Correct!
OR>> It makes me sad.
Secondly, I would like to live in a culture city which can feel artistic everywhere.
>> I would also like to live in a city that is rich in culture.
I hope government set a policy that provide culture benefit to citizen so that every can watch concert, musical, movie at a low price.
>> I hope that the government will set a policy that will provide benefits to the citizens so that everyone can watch a concert, musical or a movie at a low price.
I think culture give so important influence to people and enhance the level of happiness.
>> I think that one\'s culture is important to infuence people and to promote happiness.
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