Describe your kindergarten graduation what did you wear and how was your graduation?
학생이 쓴 원문
I wore graduation gown at kindergarten graduation, the gown was navy and white.
And I sang group QUEEN\'s song and danced.
I feel excited because kindergarten course finish and a new school life begins.
My mom cried.
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Cheers,
Jean~~
Describe your kindergarten graduation what did you wear and how was your graduation?
I wore graduation gown at kindergarten graduation, the gown was navy and white.
>> I wore a graduation gown at kindergarten graduation; the gown was navy and white.
And I sang group QUEEN\'s song and danced.
>> And my class sang the band Queen’s song and danced to it.
I feel excited because kindergarten course finish and a new school life begins.
>> I felt excited because my kindergarten course was finished and a new school life was about to begin.
My mom cried.
>> CORRECT ~~
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