Describe your relationship with your family.

2021-01-15 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

학생이 쓴 원문

I have one older sister, mom, dad, and my aunt in my family. I talk a lot with all of my family members. If I want do discuss something serious about my career or school reports, I usually talk with my parents. They usually give me a piece of advice and encourage me a lot. When I have some problems with my friends, then I usually talk with my sister. Since we are in similar ages, she sympathizes with me very well. Since my parents are quite older than me, they have different point of views with me. For example, they tend to have more conservative and stable perspectives. On the other hand, since my sister is much younger than them and have already experienced what I am experiencing through right now, she gives me more realistic advice to me. I also love my aunt, too. To be frankly speaking, she is not my real aunt. However, since I have known her for a long time, I call her my \'aunt\'. I feel attached to her as if she were a real aunt. She always treat me with warmth and gentleness. .

강사 첨삭

I am delightful to know that you have a close relationship with your family! Stay happy, [이름]hee! -Faith-
I have one older sister, mom, dad, and my aunt in my family.
>> CORRECT
OR: I have a family of five, my one older sister, mom, dad, and my aunt.
I talk a lot with all of my family members. 
>> CORRECT
If I want do discuss something serious about my career or school reports, I usually talk with my parents. 
>> CORRECT
They usually give me a piece of advice and encourage me a lot. 
>> CORRECT
OR: They usually give me significant advice and uplift me a lot. 
When I have some problems with my friends, then I usually talk with my sister. 
>> CORRECT
OR: When I have some problems with my friends, then I usually confide in my sister. 
Since we are in similar ages, she sympathizes with me very well. 
>> Since she is just one year older than me, she sympathizes with me very well. 
Since my parents are quite older than me, they have different point of views with me. 
>> Since my parents are quite older than me, they have different point of views from me.
For example, they tend to have more conservative and stable perspectives. 
>> CORRECT
On the other hand, since my sister is much younger than them and have already experienced what I am experiencing through right now, she gives me more realistic advice to me. 
>> On the other hand, since my sister is much younger than them and we experience the same thing now, she gives me more realistic advice.
I also love my aunt, too.
>> I love my aunt, too.
To be frankly speaking, she is not my real aunt. 
>> Frankly speaking, she is not my real aunt. 
However, since I have known her for a long time, I call her my \'aunt\'. 
>> CORRECT
I feel attached to her as if she were a real aunt.
>> I feel attached to her as if she were my real aunt.
She always treat me with warmth and gentleness.
>> She always treats me with warmth and gentleness.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·