Design and describe a tiny island that would be perfect escape for you for a few days.

2014-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Design and describe a tiny island that would be perfect escape for you for a few days. Actually, it would be difficult for me to relax in a 'tiny' island. Because a tiny island is not likely to have good infrastructure to live, so even I may make a meal by myself. I think it would be too irritating. Also, I can't communicate with many people in tiny island, so that I am going to be depressed easily. For these reasons, I may choose a island which is well known for 'city', such as Manhattan. In there, I will be able to meet new people with different backgrounds and braoden my perspectives. Also, I can enjoy the atmosphere of New York and 'New Yorkers' sitting at a cafe in heart of the city and watching through windows. I think it would be cool and good to rest. this is why I like to choose the lsland named 'Manhattan' or such city islands in order to escape from few days and relax.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Cindy!

Thanks for sharing your thoughts about out topic for today.

And you have pulled it out. Good job!

That was a comprehensive one.

Well, I do just wish that you would have that dream someday.
See you next week and enjoy your weekend!


Always,

Kathrine ^^


Design and describe a tiny island that would be perfect escape for you for a few days.

Actually, it would be difficult for me to relax in a \'tiny\' island.

>>  correct!

Because a tiny island is not likely to have good infrastructure to live, so even I may make a meal by myself.

>>  Because a tiny island does not likely to have a good infrastructure to live, that I have  to even make a meal for myself.

I think it would be too irritating.

>>  correct!

Also, I can\'t communicate with many people in tiny island, so that I am going to be depressed easily.

>>  correct!
 For these reasons, I may choose a island which is well known for \'city\', such as Manhattan.

>>  For these reasons, I may choose an island which is well known for its \'city\', such as Manhattan.

In there, I will be able to meet new people with different background and braoden my perspectives.

>> There, I will be able to meet new people with different backgrounds, and I could broaden my perspectives.

Also, I can enjoy the atmosphere of New York and \'New Yorkers\' sitting at a cafe in heart of the city and watching through windows.

>>  I could also enjoy the atmosphere of New York and the \'New Yorkers\' while sitting in the cafe in heart of the city and watching through  the window.

I think it would be cool and good to rest. 

 >>  I think that it would be cool and it is good to rest.
this is why I like to choose the lsland named \'Manhattan\' or such city islands in order to escape from few days and relax.

>>  That is why I like to choose the island named \'Manhattan\' or such city islands in order to escape for a few days and relax.

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