Design and describe a tiny island that would be perfect escape for you for a few days.
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Hello there Cindy!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts about out topic for today.
And you have pulled it out. Good job!
That was a comprehensive one.
Well, I do just wish that you would have that dream someday.
See you next week and enjoy your weekend!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Design and describe a tiny island that would be perfect escape for you for a few days.
Actually, it would be difficult for me to relax in a \'tiny\' island.
>> correct!
Because a tiny island is not likely to have good infrastructure to live, so even I may make a meal by myself.
>> Because a tiny island does not likely to have a good infrastructure to live, that I have to even make a meal for myself.
I think it would be too irritating.
>> correct!
Also, I can\'t communicate with many people in tiny island, so that I am going to be depressed easily.
>> correct!
For these reasons, I may choose a island which is well known for \'city\', such as Manhattan.
>> For these reasons, I may choose an island which is well known for its \'city\', such as Manhattan.
In there, I will be able to meet new people with different background and braoden my perspectives.
>> There, I will be able to meet new people with different backgrounds, and I could broaden my perspectives.
Also, I can enjoy the atmosphere of New York and \'New Yorkers\' sitting at a cafe in heart of the city and watching through windows.
>> I could also enjoy the atmosphere of New York and the \'New Yorkers\' while sitting in the cafe in heart of the city and watching through the window.
I think it would be cool and good to rest.
>> I think that it would be cool and it is good to rest.
this is why I like to choose the lsland named \'Manhattan\' or such city islands in order to escape from few days and relax.
>> That is why I like to choose the island named \'Manhattan\' or such city islands in order to escape for a few days and relax.
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