Dessert
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Theme: [ESSAY] Write about a legend/folktale/story related to a dessert that you know.
I know story about dessert snake.
In dessert, snakes move with jumping.
Do you know why?
Because in dessert, the sand is very hot so it can just jump to move.
When the snake jump, it can minimize the time when the skin hits sand.
It is very amazing~! ^-^ : )
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Theme: [ESSAY] Write about a legend/folktale/story related to a dessert that you know.
I know story about dessert snake.
>> I know a story about a desert snake.
In dessert, snakes move with jumping.
>> In the desert, snakes move through jumping.
Do you know why?
>> correct~~
Because in dessert, the sand is very hot so it can just jump to move.
>> This is because, in the desert, the sand is very hot that\'s why it can just jump to move.
When the snake jump, it can minimize the time when the skin hits sand.
>> When the snake jumps, it can minimize the time when its skin touches the sand.
It is very amazing~! ^-^ : )
>> or: I find this very fascinating.
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