Destiny
학생이 쓴 원문
Destiny is determined when we were born. However, I believe that destiny is sometimes changed. We should try effort to face our destiny. It is hard to overcome destiny, but our efforts don\'t disappear. Those efforts will make a new life. I can\'t assure that it is a good life, but it will be better than before. Some people think that destiny is the fiction of how we think. I\'m not sure of this opinion, but I agree that our thoughts and efforts will affect our life.
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Good evening, [이름]!
I appreciate you for submitting your homework.
Facing our destiny with efforts to make it better is really important. ^^
P.S. Good job in making your sentences. ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> Destiny was determined when we were born.
However, I believe that destiny is sometimes changed.
>> However, I believe that destiny can sometimes be changed.
We should try effort to face our destiny.
>> We should try to put effort to face our destiny.
It is hard to overcome destiny, but our efforts don\'t disappear.
>> CORRECT.
Those efforts will make a new life.
>> CORRECT.
I can\'t assure that it is a good life, but it will be better than before.
>> CORRECT.
Some people think that destiny is the fiction of how we think.
>> CORRECT.
I\'m not sure of this opinion, but I agree that our thoughts and efforts will affect our life.
>> CORRECT.
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