Developments or environment

Nowadays interests on environmental issues have been increased a lot. Because of the pollution, some argue that development should be in limit like wiping off the Amazon forest. In my opinion they are partly right. Because pollutions take affect all over the world beyond Brazil itself. However the limitation over amazon is unresonable. A number of countries have developed their land so they could accumulate wealth. That\'s why i think it\'s unfair to Brazil as being developed countries seems impossible without cutting off some part of Amazon. Therefore, as far as i concerned, in order to insist on development of Amazon, countries should pay something for it just like environmental taxs. People on earth should tske responsibility together instead of handing it off only to Brazil

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Developments on the environment

Nowadays interests on environmental issues have been increased a lot.

>>Nowadays, the interest on environmental issues have increased a lot.

Because of the pollution, some argue that development should be in limit like wiping off the Amazon forest.

>>Because of the pollution, some argue that environmental development should be limited like the wiping off of the Amazon forest.

In my opinion, they are partly right.

CORRECT!

or>>In my view, they are partially correct.

Because pollutions take affect all over the world beyond Brazil itself.

>>Because pollutions are taking effect all over the world even beyond the borders of Brazil itself.

However the limitation over amazon is unresonable.

>>However, the limitation over amazon is unreasonable.

A number of countries have developed their land so they could accumulate wealth.

>>A number of countries have developed their land so that they can accumulate more wealth.

That\'s why i think it\'s unfair to Brazil as being developed countries seems impossible without cutting off some part of Amazon.

>>That\'s why I think that it\'s unfair to Brazil being a developing country. It seems impossible for it to be developed without having to cut off some parts of the Amazon.

Therefore, as far as i concerned, in order to insist on development of Amazon, countries should pay something for it just like environmental taxs.

>>Therefore, as far as I am concerned, in order to insist on the development of the Amazon, other countries should pay something for it just like an environmental tax.

People on earth should tske responsibility together instead of handing it off only to Brazil

>>People on earth should take responsibility as one, instead of handing it all off only to Brazil.