Diamond
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When I read this article, I was thinking about the meaning of being and value.
Indeed, Does this tennis ball sized stone deserve to pay for 61 million dollars ?
If we spend 61 million dollars for buying foods for poor children, How many children can we save?
People have different thoughts and Philosophy, different value.
Diamond is the most precious thing for some people on the other hand Diamond is just a stone for some people like me. I watched vary interesting documentary program before.
scientist developed artificial jewel through the advanced technology. This stone proved stronger than Diamond and purer and more glow than genuine Diamond.
More interesting was that this compounded artificial jewel was just 100 dollars.
But people values diamond higher than artificial diamond.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Mr. [Name]. ^^
Thank you for taking the time to read an article and write something about it over the weekend even if you were exhausted.
I truly appreciate your diligence and the effort you put in our classes.
I also find your opinions regarding this matter good and interesting.
Your philosophies in life are astounding.
I think, a piece of stone, no matter how large it is and no matter how valuable some people may see it, is not worth that much.
Have you ever heard of blood diamonds?
People in Zimbabwe (a place in South Africa), mine diamonds in the rivers and mountains for a living.
But to them, salt is more important than diamonds because they only see this gem as a piece of stone.
A diamond is deemed worthless until a company cuts and molds it and places its cereal number in it.
It\'s value increases when a jeweling company buys it and sells it off to the public.
That\'s how diamonds, or any gem and precious metals for that matter, become expensive.
It\'s high value is just an illusion.
People buy it because it makes them look \'rich\'.
I agree with you when you said 61 million dollars could do a lot of things and could go a great distance.
It could help the people who are hungry and suffer from poverty.
I wish more people would have the same ideology with yours when it comes to this matter.
I hope you\'re having a nice day.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry
When I read this article, I was thinking about the meaning of being and value.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> After reading this article, I\'ve thought of the meaning of being and value. Indeed, Does this tennis ball sized stone deserve to pay for 61 million dollars ?
>> Indeed, does this tennis ball sized stone deserve to be paid for 61 million dollars?If we spend 61 million dollars for buying foods for poor children, How many children can we save?
>> If we spend 61 million dollars for buying food for poor children, how many children can we save?People have different thoughts and Philosophy, different value.
>> People have different thoughts, philosophy (philosophies), and value (values). Diamond is the most precious thing for some people on the other hand Diamond is just a stone for some people like me.
>> Diamond is the most precious thing for some people. On the other hand, diamond is just a stone for some people like me.
OR >> Some people see a diamond as the most precious gem, while other people like me only see it as a piece of stone.
I watched vary interesting documentary program before.>> I watched a very interesting documentary program before.OR >> I have watched a very interesting documentary program before.scientist developed artificial jewel through the advanced technology.
>> Scientists have developed an artificial jewel through the advanced technology.
This stone proved stronger than Diamond and purer and more glow than genuine Diamond. >> This stone proved to be stronger, purer and has more glow than the genuine diamond.
More interesting was that this compounded artificial jewel was just 100 dollars.
>> A more interesting detail about it was that, this compounded artificial jewel was just 100 dollars.
OR >> A more interesting detail about it was that, this compounded artificial jewel only costs 100 dollars.
But people values diamond higher than artificial diamond.
>> But people value the genuine diamond more than the artificial diamond.
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