Diary
학생이 쓴 원문
My best friend is in Russia.
But thanks to a smart phone, we can chat each other and inform some news freely.
She will come to Korea quite soon, in this december, but I'm missing her so much whenever I find out I'm alone among crowd.
As the fall semester begings young freshmen look so energetic compared to my situation. What's more, this week we are having anual sports matches between my school and the rival school. That's why the school is so noisy with people who are enthusiatic about preparing the match. But I'm a junior and not enthusiatic anymore.
I'm a little bit under pressure about seeking job even though I want to run my own business. Becuase It's neccessary for me to find a job to learn and to make money at first. However, the more I talk with friend about this matter to reduce my worry the more I realize that I'm not ready to get a job. Am I fit in a job market? What industry and what department will suit me? I'm so stressful.
강사 첨삭
Hello once again baby,
Thank you for making your composition..
Your bestfriend is so blessed to have you..The first time I met you I know that you are so sweet and kind, making me so comfortable to talk with you baby..
And about your annual sportsfest, I still hope you can enjoy that..
Just try to join some of the sports and maybe someday we dont know, you will become a very good athlete of your country, yeah!!
talk to you again tomorrow baby..Take care always..
xoxoTeacher Cam^^
My best friend is in Russia.
>>correctBut thanks to a smart phone, we can chat each other and inform some news freely. >>But thanks to smart phone, we can chat with each other and inform some news freely.
She will come to Korea quite soon, in this december, but I\'m missing her so much whenever I find out I\'m alone among crowd.
>>correct..Observe proper capitalization of the word December..:)As the fall semester begings young freshmen look so energetic compared to my situation.
>>correct..Observe proper spelling of the word BEGINS
What\'s more, this week we are having anual sports matches between my school and the rival school.
>>correct..Observe proper spelling of the word ANNUAL
That\'s why the school is so noisy with people who are enthusiatic about preparing the match.
>>correct
But I\'m a junior and not enthusiatic anymore.
>>correctI\'m a little bit under pressure about seeking job even though I want to run my own business.
>>correct
Becuase It\'s neccessary for me to find a job to learn and to make money at first.
>>correct
However, the more I talk with friend about this matter to reduce my worry the more I realize that I\'m not ready to get a job.
>>correct
Am I fit in a job market?
>>Do I fit in the job market?
What industry and what department will suit me?
>>correct
I\'m so stressful.
>>correct
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