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2010-12-03 · 첨삭 강사 abby

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There is the one reason why I go to fitness club on Wednesdays. That is because a handsome trainer. Our center provides <Group Exersing Program> that is some people do exercising together under trainer's teaching. The programs include yoga, diet dance, belly dance, kick bixing and spinning bike. The trainer charging of spinning bike is very handsome and he is also a CF model. Moreover he appeared in some dramas, CFs and movie. The spinning bike program is held on every Wednesday, so I really go to the center on Wednesday.

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Hello [이름]!Thank you for the good composition today. I am happy for you. Anyway, getting attracted to the opposite sex is just normal. Admiring someone feels good, because you always have the inspiration to work. Hahaha! But that’s true. I’m even sure that you always get excited and always look forward of that day just to see him. Kikiki! Just keep being pretty and fit also. Keep safe and have fun. Enjoy the rest of the day and have a happy weekend! ^_^ T. Abby   diary-2 >> DIARY 2 There is the one reason why I go to fitness club on Wednesdays. >> There is one reason why I go to the fitness club on Wednesdays. >> There is one reason why I go to the fitness club every Wednesday.That is because a handsome trainer.  >> That is because of a handsome trainer. Our center provides <Group Exersing Program> that is some people do exercising together under trainer's teaching. >> That center provides a Group Exercising Program where people exercise together with their trainer.The programs include yoga, diet dance, belly dance, kick bixing and spinning bike. >> The program includes yoga, diet dancing, belly dancing, kick boxing and spinning bike.The trainer charging of spinning bike is very handsome and he is also a CF model. >> The trainer in-charge of the spinning bike is very handsome and he is also a CF Model. Moreover he appeared in some dramas, CFs and movie.  >> Moreover, he had appeared to some dramas, CFs and movies already.The spinning bike program is held on every Wednesday, so I really go to the center on Wednesday. >> The spinning bike program is held every Wednesday, so I really go to the center on that day. >> The spinning bike program is always help on Wednesdays so I really go there on that scheduled day.

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