Diary 3
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
You did a marvelous job in writing your diary today. ^^
It was a wonder how you put into words those situations that you met.
However, you have to be careful with the use of some conjunctions and articles.
Don\'t worry it\'s just minimal and I know that we can improve more on that.
Anyway thanks a lot for sharing me your experience and I know that you\'ll improve more.
Have a good day!
I watched the Jurrasic World last Saturday at the CGV
>> I watched the Jurassic World last Saturday at the CGV.
The director is Steven.
>> correct
I like him.
>> correct
He made movie interesting.
>> He made the movie interesting.
The landscape was cool.
>> correct
I don\'t laugh but it was not very funny sight.
>> DID YOU MEAN: I didn\'t laugh because it was not a very funny sight.
But it totally fun.
>> Nonetheless, it was totally fun.
OR:
>> However, it was totally funny
>> [Conjunctions like but, and or yet are used to connect parts of the sentence, don\'t use it at the beginning of the sentence.]
My mom said it was fun too.
>> correct
OR:
>> My mom agreed that it was fun.
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