Diary-4

2010-12-07 · 첨삭 강사 abby

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I teach a high school student for my part time job. I go to her house two times a week, and tutor mathematics. The reason why I do part time job is to earn money for monthly rent.So I have started to do this since july, even though I get salary by working. My student is 18 years old, and she is not good at mathematics, so she want me to teach her. Having been teaching her for 5 months, I found that the problem of her math grade comes from no desire to study. She has no plan for university life, no dreams of what she want to be, and finally, she is not motivated to study. she hardly do homework and doesn't concentrate on me during class.she seems to be in useless thought. It is more difficult for me to motivate her to study than teach.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! Thank you for sending another composition this day. I know how you feel about this.Anyway, just give more patience in teaching because for sure, in no time, she will realize what she is losing when she doesn’t concentrate. But most of the time, as a teacher, we want a good result from them because we feel useless without them having good scores after all the effort. Furthermore, just try to make friends with her first then at the end advise her to study hard because this is for her future. Anyway, regarding your writing, you did very well! Just be careful of the capitalization of words this time. Thank you for sharing this to me. Keep safe and I’ll see you tomorrow! ^_^ T. ABBY    Diary-4 >> correct I teach a high school student for my part time job. >> correct I go to her house two times a week, and tutor mathematics. >> correct >> I go to her house twice a week and tutor her Mathematics. (Much better) The reason why I do part time job is to earn money for monthly rent. >> correct >> The reason why I do part time job is to earn money for my monthly home rental. So I have started to do this since july, even though I get salary by working.>> So I have started doing this since July even though I get paid by working. >> So I have started doing this from July even though I get my salary by working.My student is 18 years old, and she is not good at mathematics, so she want me to teach her. >> My student is 18 years old and she’s not good in Mathematics, so she wants me to teach her. Having been teaching her for 5 months, I found that the problem of her math grade comes from no desire to study. >> Having been teaching her for 5 months let me realized that her main problem of not getting a good score in Math is because she has no desire of studying. >> Having been teaching her for 5 months, I found out that the main problem why she usually has a low grade in Math because she has a very little desire of studying in subject. She has no plan for university life, no dreams of what she want to be, and finally, she is not motivated to study. >> She is an easy go lucky student, without plans for her University life nor dreams on what she wants to be and finally, she’s not very much motivated to study.she hardly do homework and doesn't concentrate on me during class. >> She hardly does her homeworks and doesn’t concentrate on what I’m teaching during our class. >> She hardly does her homeworks and doesn’t concentrate a lot during our class. she seems to be in useless thought. >> She seems to  have a useless thought.It is more difficult for me to motivate her to study than teach. >> It is even more difficult for me to motivate her to study than to teach.

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