Diary-5

2010-12-09 · 첨삭 강사 Nick

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I overslept this morning because my phone battery had been dead and my phone had been off when you called me. I woke up at 8:45 am although I had to be at office until 8:30. With a hurry, I woked up and called my co-worker and told that I would be late a little. It was a very terrible morning. It heavily snows today like January 4 this year. That day was the first time to go to the office. I was scheduled to go to the head office of our company and take part in 5-week orientation at the training institute. Therefore I had to carry my big baggage for 5-weeks life. When I was about to be out of house, I was really surprised to see the road be blocked from heavy snow. With a great deal of groaning and grunting for my heavy baggage, I barely went to the main office on time.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]^^

At least you were able to show up to the main office on time.hahaha. And everyone of us has our off or bad days. Let's just hope bad luck will not happen any time soon.

T. Abby

I overslept this morning because my phone battery had been dead and my phone had been off when you called me.
>>I overslept this morning because my phone battery was empty and it had been off when you called me.

I woke up at 8:45 am although I had to be at office until 8:30.

>>I woke up at 8:45am although I had to be in the office at 8:30am.
With a hurry, I woked up and called my co-worker and told that I would be late a little.

>>In a hurry, I got up and called my co-worker and told her that I would be a little late.

It was a very terrible morning.

>>CORRECT :)
It heavily snows today like January 4 this year.

>>It뭩 snowing heavily today like January 4th this year.
That day was the first time to go to the office.

>>That day was my first time to go to the office.
I was scheduled to go to the head office of our company and take part in 5-week orientation at the training institute.

>>I was scheduled to go to the company뭩 head office and take part in a 5-weel orientation at the training institute.
Therefore I had to carry my big baggage for 5-weeks life.

>>Therefore I had to carry my big baggage/luggage for 5 weeks.

When I was about to be out of house, I was really surprised to see the road be blocked from heavy snow.

>>When I was about to get out of the house, I was really surprised to see the road blocked from heavy snow.

With a great deal of groaning and grunting for my heavy baggage, I barely went to the main office on time.

>>With a great deal of groaning and grunting for my heavy baggage/luggage, I barely reached the main office on time.

 

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