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2010-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 abby

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I dyed my hair yellow brown yesterday. Actually, I am required not to dye my hair because it couldn't seem to be classical or neat to customers. Customers think banker's tipical image is neat. therefore we should always dress well and put make up not heavily. Thus I should concern about my appearance ath the office. Since I haven't dyed and got a perm for 5~6 years, I felt tired of my hair style. So I went to hair shop after working yesterday. I payed about $60 for dying my hair and I thoght it was a little expensive. But, I like the color and style.

강사 첨삭

Wow, what an impressive composition..^^

Keep up the good work..

Take care of yourself and talk to you again next week..

T.Abby^^

I dyed my hair yellow brown yesterday.

>>correct!
Actually, I am required not to dye my hair because it couldn't seem to be classical or neat to customers.

>>correct!
Customers think banker's tipical image is neat.

>>correct! (typical)
therefore we should always dress well and put make up not heavily.

>>Therefore, we should always dress well and put on light make up.
Thus I should concern about my appearance ath the office.

>>Thus, I should be concerned about my appearance at the office.
Since I haven't dyed and got a perm for 5~6 years, I felt tired of my hair style.

>>Since I got perm for 5-6 years and havent dyed, I really felt tired of my hair style.
So I went to hair shop after working yesterday.

>>SO I went to the hair salon yesterday after work.
I payed about $60 for dying my hair and I thoght it was a little expensive.

>>correct!
But, I like the color and style.

>>correct!

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