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Event is happened when I was working yesterday. I was on my way to clean the rag, and I saw black guy. He walked hall in front of me. Suddenly He stopped walking and looked back. Although I made eye contact, I didn't say hello. I thought he felt awkward too. I was embarrassed, so I walked quickly pass him. After cleaned rag, I went to back office and I met him again. Then he said hi with a low voice.
Few days ago, I had a similar experience. It was a happy sunny day. When I withdrew money I saw somebody waited, then I felt sorry. I decided to start a conversation. When I looked my back, I realized he is a foreigner. He was 27 years old, and he was come from Russia. I want to tell him more, but I couldn't. Although I told first,I was too shy to continue conversation. I ran away with bye.
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HI [이름],
I had a great time reading your article. I wish you can meet that guy again.
See you tomorrow and I'm looking forward for more stories. ^^
Good night ,
--- Connie ---
Event is happened when I was working yesterday.
>> When I was working yesterday something happened.
I was on my way to clean the rag, and I saw black guy.
>> While I was on my way to clean the rug I saw a black guy.
He walked hall in front of me.
>> He walked in the hallway just in front of me.
Suddenly He stopped walking and looked back.
>> Suddenly, he stopped walking and looked back.
Although I made eye contact, I didn't say hello.
>> Although I looked at him straight on the eye, I never said hello.
I thought he felt awkward too.
>> Correct
I was embarrassed, so I walked quickly pass him.
>> I was embarrassed, so I passed by him quickly.
After cleaned rag, I went to back office and I met him again.
>> After cleaning the rag, I went back to my office and I say him again.
Then he said hi with a low voice.
>> CorrectFew days ago, I had a similar experience.
>> Correct
It was a happy sunny day.
>> Correct
When I withdrew money I saw somebody waited, then I felt sorry.
>> While I was withdrawing money I saw somebody waiting, then I felt sorry.
I decided to start a conversation.
>> Correct
When I looked my back, I realized he is a foreigner.
>> When I looked at him, I realized that he is a foreigner.
He was 27 years old, and he was come from Russia. I want to tell him more, but I couldn't.
>> He is 27 years old and he is from Russia, I want to tell him more but I couldn't.
Although I told first,I was too shy to continue conversation. I ran away with bye.
>> Although I talked to him first I was too shy to continue the conversation, I ran away and said goodbye
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