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2011-05-13 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

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Event is happened when I was working yesterday. I was on my way to clean the rag, and I saw black guy. He walked hall in front of me. Suddenly He stopped walking and looked back. Although I made eye contact, I didn't say hello. I thought he felt awkward too. I was embarrassed, so I walked quickly pass him. After cleaned rag, I went to back office and I met him again. Then he said hi with a low voice. Few days ago, I had a similar experience. It was a happy sunny day. When I withdrew money I saw somebody waited, then I felt sorry. I decided to start a conversation. When I looked my back, I realized he is a foreigner. He was 27 years old, and he was come from Russia. I want to tell him more, but I couldn't. Although I told first,I was too shy to continue conversation. I ran away with bye.

강사 첨삭

HI [이름], I had a great time reading your article. I wish you can meet that guy again. See you tomorrow and I'm looking forward for more stories. ^^ Good night ,  --- Connie ---   Event is happened when I was working yesterday. >>  When I was working yesterday something happened. I was on my way to clean the rag, and I saw black guy. >> While I was on my way to clean the rug I saw a black guy. He walked hall in front of me. >> He walked in the hallway just in front of me. Suddenly He stopped walking and looked back. >> Suddenly, he stopped walking and looked back. Although I made eye contact, I didn't say hello. >> Although I looked at him straight on the eye, I never said hello.  I thought he felt awkward too. >> Correct  I was embarrassed, so I walked quickly pass him. >> I was embarrassed, so I passed by him quickly.  After cleaned rag, I went to back office and I met him again. >> After cleaning the rag, I went back to my office and I say him again. Then he said hi with a low voice. >> CorrectFew days ago, I had a similar experience. >> Correct It was a happy sunny day. >> Correct When I withdrew money I saw somebody waited, then I felt sorry. >> While I was withdrawing money I saw somebody waiting, then I felt sorry. I decided to start a conversation. >> Correct When I looked my back, I realized he is a foreigner. >> When I looked at him, I realized that he is a foreigner.  He was 27 years old, and he was come from Russia. I want to tell him more, but I couldn't. >> He is 27 years old and he is from Russia, I want to tell him more but I couldn't. Although I told first,I was too shy to continue conversation. I ran away with bye. >> Although I talked to him first I was too shy to continue the conversation, I ran away and said goodbye

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