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Every year, My company has held the competition of research and development.
So, I was asked to join the research and development team as an advisor.
My team got together to check the precess of the project and I am also required to join the meeting.The team leader was trying to invent the measuring instrument to gauge the coefficient friction.
The project was being processed well. The device for gauging was great. But the problem we need to solve was how we can fix the machine we invented on the surface of the escalator's step.
We talked a lot to find out the solution. After the meeting, We had dinner together.Every Monday, I used to receive a lot of calls from the owner of building and the elevator engineer.
Recently, The new law about the standard for the elevator was passed.
This new standard for the elevator makes installment of door safety gear mandatory.So, All elevator in korea should be installed by July first.
The building administrator complaint a lot.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Mr. [Name]! (^^,)
How\'s your day going so far?
Thank you once again for writing in our composition board.
I think research is an integral part for safety and quality control.
Research has played a very important role in making everything around us more convenient and useful.
It\'s a good thing that your company takes a great part on it.
I really hope your research and the device your currently developing would be a success. ^^
I also hope that one day, my government would also give a close attention to research and provide funds for it.
Although it\'s a far-fetched idea, I think it would really benefit my country.
I hope you\'re having a great day.
I\'ll see you again tomorrow.
Take care always.
~Teacher Charry (^_^)
Every year, My company has held the competition of research and development.
>> Every year, my company holds a competition for research and development.
So, I was asked to join the research and development team as an advisor.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> That\'s why, I was asked to join the research and development team and function as an advisor.My team got together to check the precess of the project and I am also required to join the meeting.
>> My team got together to check the process of the project and I am also required to join the meeting.
The team leader was trying to invent the measuring instrument to gauge the coefficient friction.>> CORRECT!
OR >> The team leader was trying to invent a measuring instrument that would gauge the coefficient friction.The project was being processed well.
>> The project is being processed well.
The device for gauging was great.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The gauging device that they are trying to come up with was great.
But the problem we need to solve was how we can fix the machine we invented on the surface of the escalator\'s step.
>> But the problem we need to solve was, how can we the machine we invented on the surface of the escalator\'s step.
We talked a lot to find out the solution.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We discussed a lot to come up with a solution.
After the meeting, We had dinner together.
>> After the meeting, we had dinner together.
OR >> After the meeting, we ate dinner together.
Every Monday, I used to receive a lot of calls from the owner of building and the elevator engineer.
>> Every Monday, I used to receive a lot of calls from the owner of a building and the elevator engineer.
Recently, The new law about the standard for the elevator was passed. >> Recently, the new law about the standard for the elevator was passed. OR >> The new law concerning the standard for the elevator was recently passed. This new standard for the elevator makes installment of door safety gear mandatory.
>> This new standard for the elevator makes the installment of the door\'s safety gear mandatory.
So, All elevator in korea should be installed by July first.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: So, all safety gears for elevator doors in Korea should be installed by July first.
The building administrator complaint a lot.
>> The building administrator complained a lot.
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