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2016-05-16 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Today is Pentecost Sunday. My team that I belong visited the KDI school to hold the Sunday mass for KDI school students. Over 30 students attended the mass. Moyse staff prepared the cards written the fruits of the holy spirit. The mass of attendees picked up the card during the communion. The Moyse's priest can not speak English well. So, He asked me to translate what he was saying.Whenever I was asked to translate something suddenly, I used to be nervous wether I make grammar mistakes. The priest wanted to know that the picking up the card of fruit of holy sprit during the mass is common event in your country. I translated his words carefully. African friends answered "Yes". I prayed for Jesus that send holy sprit and fill my soul his wisdom. Because I really need the wisdom from the Holy sprit for the interview on Wednesday.The competition rate is five for one. If I pass the exam, I will be able to have more chance to get the promotion. This licence is necessary for my position.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Mr. [Name]! ^^ How\'s your day going so far? To be honest, majority of people nowadays are scared of public speaking. It\'s no wonder why you feel nervous whenever you are asked to translate or speak on behalf of someone. The good thing about it is that, those opportunities are actually a good way for you to practice. Nobody is perfect and I think the reason why they ask you to do it for them is because they think you are the best speaker at that moment. :) So don\'t worry too much about it. ^^ By the way, congratulations for passing the exam. Let\'s continue praying. I really hope you pass the interview so you\'d get the promotion you\'ve been hoping for. You can do it. You need to believe in yourself. Do your best and let God do the rest. ^^ I hope you\'re having a great day. See you again tomorrow. ~Teacher Charry ^^ Today is Pentecost Sunday. >> CORRECT! OR >> It\'s Pentecost today. My team that I belong visited the KDI school to hold the Sunday mass for KDI school students. >> The team that I belong to visited the KDI school to hold the Sunday mass for the KDI school students. OR >> My team visited the KDI school to hold the Sunday mass for the KDI school students. Over 30 students attended the mass. >> CORRECT! OR >> There were more than 30 students who attended the mass. Moyse staff prepared the cards written the fruits of the holy spirit. >> The Moyse staff prepared the cards with the fruits of the holy spirit written on it. The mass of attendees picked up the card during the communion. >> The attendees of the mass picked up the cards during the communion. The Moyse\'s priest can not speak English well. >> CORRECT! OR >> The Moyse\'s priest is not very fluent in English. So, He asked me to translate what he was saying. >> So, he asked me to translate what he was saying. OR >> So, he asked me to translate for him. Whenever I was asked to translate something suddenly, I used to be nervous wether I make grammar mistakes. >> Whenever I am asked to translate in English, I get nervous and conscious of my grammar. The priest wanted to know that the picking up the card of fruit of holy sprit during the mass is common event in your country. >> The priest wanted to know if picking up the card with the fruit of the holy sprit written on it during the mass is a common event in your country. I translated his words carefully. >> CORRECT! OR >> I was very careful in translating his words. African friends answered \"Yes\". >> Our African friends answered \"Yes\". I prayed for Jesus that send holy sprit and fill my soul his wisdom. >> I prayed for Jesus to send the holy sprit and fill my soul with his wisdom. Because I really need the wisdom from the Holy sprit for the interview on Wednesday. >> It\'s because I really need the wisdom from the holy sprit for my interview on Wednesday. The competition rate is five for one. >> CORRECT! OR >> There are five people competing for one position. If I pass the exam, I will be able to have more chance to get the promotion. >> If I pass the exam, I will be able to have more chances to get a promotion. This licence is necessary for my position. >> CORRECT! OR >> This licence is required for my position.

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